I have uploaded the feedback below and these are additional comments for the problem statement assignment. Avoid nondescript pronoun in formal writing, where you put workplace and places he say hat is redundant and confusing, in the second paragraph the second and third sentence does not make sense. Last, he said this is not a peer review article.
Draft Literature Review
Based on the problem statement that you submitted in Unit 6, you will take the next step in this assignment—to find out what is already known about your topic. If the feedback that you received on your Unit 6 assignment enables you to improve your problem statement, make those changes first, and begin your work on this assignment with your revised problem statement.
The literature review is a key step in research in psychology: the point at which you summarize the state of what is known in your topic area, and highlight what remains to be learned. The literature review that you complete for your dissertation will provide the primary evidence to support the importance of your dissertation topic. The word review may not communicate the full process involved. A well-developed literature review does review the research that has been completed in a particular topic area. However, it also synthesizes the results of that literature and attempts to paint a clear picture of the state of knowledge on that subject.
Even if you began working on this assignment during Unit 6, you would have had only two weeks to complete it. For that reason, this assignment is called a draft literature review. As you will see when you examine the Draft Literature Review Scoring Guide, the expectation is that you have made a solid first attempt. That means three things: that you have made good use of the feedback you received on your Unit 6 assignment to further focus and clarify your problem statement, that you have done a good job of identifying what you consider to be the 10–12 most significant recent scholarly sources in your topic and problem area, and that you have digested these sources thoroughly enough to be able to synthesize their content into a coherent statement of the current knowledge in your problem area. Your draft literature review need not be perfect or completely comprehensive. However, it should demonstrate your beginning mastery of these aspects of the doctoral research thinking process.
To complete a successful draft literature review:
Strive for clarity and conciseness in your problem statement. Knowing exactly what you are seeking is the best way to focus your search productively. Before returning to the library to continue your search for scholarly sources, carefully review the feedback you received on your two earlier assignments (Research Topic Investigation and Problem Statement). Use the feedback you received from your instructor to tighten and clarify your problem statement.
Review the sources that you have already found on your topic, including the ones you found for your Unit 4 assignment, and refine your list of key words that will help you focus your search productively. If you need some help with this process, review the resource Get Critical Search Skills.
Continue your search, looking for those sources that seem to most clearly address the topic and problem area you chose. As you review a potential resource, first read the abstract. Then, if you are not sure how valuable that source will be, skim the article to identify the key points and evidence provided. In this manner, begin compiling your list of potential sources. You may need to consider at least 20–25 sources before you can come up with the 10–12 you need to represent current knowledge in your topic area.
Read the articles in depth, starting with those you believe most directly address your problem area. For a method to accomplish this process, review the presentation Locating Common Themes in a Literature Review. You may want to use the Capellapillar process described in that piece.
Look at the results of your reading (or your Capellapillar, if you used that approach). After analyzing the various points of view, synthesize the ideas to create as clear a picture as possible of what you believe to be the current status of knowledge in your topic and problem area. Be clear about what is known and what questions remain.
Write your draft literature review. Begin with a clear problem statement. As you work through the ideas involved, describe each of the major viewpoints that you encountered in the literature. Compare and contrast the differing viewpoints, pointing out ideas that appear to be shared, as well as those areas in which different authors took differing approaches. Finally, synthesize a summary of the state of knowledge on your topic by using critical thinking approaches you have learned in this course. A few notes to clarify what should be included in the assignment that you submit:
“State a specific problem or issue to investigate” (in the scoring guide) refers to the latest version of your problem statement.
Your conclusion, in this case, is only a statement of what is not yet known—sometimes referred to as a “gap in our knowledge on the topic.” Your literature review comes before research is conducted, so you do not yet have any conclusion from your own research, only a statement of what is, and is not known, based on past research. In addition, this conclusion needs to include an explanation of why it is important to study this topic.
The draft literature review does not contain a Methods section, since no research has yet been conducted.
The resources that you list as references should include those you identified in your research topic investigation for the Unit 4 assignment. As a result, you have already completed a significant part of the search for resources.
Your assignment should meet the following requirements:
Written communication: Written communication is free of errors that detract from the overall message.
APA formatting: Resources and citations should be formatted according to current APA style and formatting. Note that this means you must include an abstract, title page, and reference page.
Number of resources: A minimum of 10 scholarly resources.
Length of paper: A minimum of seven typed, double-spaced pages, not including the abstract, title page, or reference page.
Font and font size: Times New Roman, 12 point.